什么算好作文
发布时间:2017年12月01日
作者:作者:Tangweisheng  

什么算好作文

——雅思作文(一)

 

/ 唐老雅1

 

很多人考雅思,考了很多遍,今天得5 分,明天得6 分,但心里还是糊涂的,全然不知道自己为什么得5 分,为什么得6 分,这就叫“摸石头考雅,考到哪算哪”!

 

先给大家几个概念,好让大家心里有数,死也死得明白,活也活得清楚。

 

概念1:雅思作文7 分是个分水岭。7 分前是多数人都能达到的,经过恰当培训20 小时以下,你我都能做到。7 分以上,恕我直言,没有50小时以上的培训和练习,难!无论那些所谓金牌培训老师说得多么天花乱坠,都难!

 

概念27 分以下的作文,不需要你写高质量的单词和句型,不需要你有精妙的思想。写得清楚就行,就是写出来别人能看懂,而且看得比较懂,知道你有一定安排,你有些地方有点水平,这就行了。一般培训老师都要求你,词尽量用大,句型用新用复杂,哪知道,这些都是吃力不讨好的!你就那点水平,写复杂了,谁看得懂啊?看不懂,你还不得5 分以下!

 

概念3:写清楚,就要求思维简单一些,直接一些。不要绕圈子,绕来绕去,把评卷人绕进去,他就读不懂了。

 

概念4:思维简单一些,直接一些,却不是那么容易做到的。因为,你的中文太好了,中文的阅读量太大了,中文思考的问题太复杂了,这些都会直接影响到你的英语表达。所以,简单化,直接化,这些都需要培训。大量的雅思写作培训老师根本不懂这个道理,一味要你复杂起来,结果你越考越差,还不知道自己是被他们坑了!

 

唐老雅在多年雅思写作培训过程中发现很多学生对雅思写作有一个极其深刻的误解,对所谓写作“亮点”很在意,认为“亮点”来自于精彩的词汇、复杂的句型或深邃的思想。这些考生似乎认为人家剑桥雅思命题人就像中国古代科举考试一样,在问计治国安民的大事。而事实是:雅思考试不过是针对非母语国家的一个普通考试,人家想考核你的不过是语言水平!

 

什么是语言水平?听说读写的能力而已。能否听懂?能否口头表达?能否读懂?能否书面表达?今天只谈书面表达,即写作。好的书面表达,有一个基本的标准,就是让人家读懂。那么,你要怎么做才能让人读懂?

 

1)你用的词汇基本能传达你的想法;

 

2)你用的句子基本能串联起那些词汇,并基本正确地将它们组织起来;

 

3)你的段落中,句子与句子之间有联系,这些句子共同来服务于一个段落的思想;

 

4)你的段落与段落之间能体现出一个基本的逻辑发展顺序。

 

这样,你的读者才能读懂你想说什么,而一旦他们读懂了,你的得分就不会很差。

 

你的读者,其实也就是那些考官,他的判断标准不是你的某个词汇或者某个句型用得好,而是你的整个文章读起来是不是顺畅,你表达的思想是否符合题目的要求。我们平时练习,应该把重点放在这里。

 

这个很难吗?也许很难——如果你没有记住词汇,满篇的词汇都不是在表达你的想法;如果你没有句子写作能力,满篇的句子都错误百出,汉语句式迭出;如果你没有想法,东扯西拉,那么,你要让人读懂你写的东西,那真是在强人所难!

 

这个很难吗?其实也不难——大凡去考雅,多少都记过一些单词,多少都读过一些句子。你扪心自问一下,写英语简单句,你能写出来吗?如果能,你就有写出清晰的雅思作文的潜力!稍加练习和点拨,你就能得到你需要的分数。如此简单,不需要“亮点”。如果有人告诉你“亮点”,那一定是他们的“卖点”,想靠蒙你来赚钱的。

 

不信,我们来看一篇:

 

【题目】Many people say that cooking and eating at home is better for the individual and the family than eating out in restaurants and canteens. Do you agree or disagree?


【习作】


Everyone has to eat. The question is, where to eat? You may cook and eat at home, or just eat out in restaurants or canteens. My personal opinion is that eating at home is better for the individual and the family than eating out.


First, it has no doubt that cooking and eating at home can save a lot of money. Generally, the cost of eating in restaurants is much higher than eating at home. By cooking at home, you don’t have to pay the labor fee for the chef, and don’t have to pay tips to the waiter. What you have to do is just a little hand operation and a little time. From supermarkets, you can buy cheap vegetables and meat, which may cost only 10 percent of the same food in a restaurant. Sometimes, you can get cheaper food in discount time. Especially, a big family may enjoy the method, as the monthly cost would be less.


Second, you can freely select your favorite food to cook. A restaurant cannot always provide you with delicious food. The taste of food in restaurants is usually designed for the public, which is not suitable for a particular guest. If you miss the taste of your mum’s soup, it’s not likely to find the same one in a restaurant. In this case, the best choice is to cook by yourself, to reproduce your mum’s food to the best you can.


Finally, it’s obvious that eating at home is more healthy and clean. You don’t know whether it’s dirty in the restaurants, and also you don’t know whether the food is fresh. But by cooking at home, you can know everything about the cooking materials. Moreover, it’s easy to control the usage of fat and oil, unless you don’t care to become too fat.


In brief, I believe that eating at home is healthy and clean. If people want to save money, eating at home is also a good choice. In addition, people can cook what they like as well. So I personally prefer eating at home. (346)

 

有“亮点”词汇吗?有“亮点”句型吗?有“亮点”思想吗?没有。有的只是拉家常般的娓娓道来。你可以试试,看自己能否读懂每一句,试着写出每一句?看看他每一段中的句子之间是如何安排的?段与段之间的递进关系是如何体现的?

 

告诉你,这篇作文可得7 分。对志在突破6 分的你来说,是不是平添了几分信心?

 

注释:

 

1. 唐伟胜,广东外语外贸大学教授,博士,英美文学研究专家。